Hi Anna.
Well done on a great session of writing on Wednesday.  It is great to see you so engrossed in your writing. Each session, you are managing to add more and more detail.  It was great to see you "light bulb" moment when you thought of the twist that you could add to your story!  You were very focussed during the demonstration of Garageband, and you ask useful questions to further your understanding.  Keep up the great work Anna.
Katie.

Garage Band Newbies

Have you ever used Garageband before? We learnt how to for Talent Development today. Katie made an example using the story of the Three Little Pigs. We learnt how to put in music and funny sound affects into the story. The funniest bit would have definitely been the different voices! For the pigs Katie used Helium Breath which of course, was a high, squeaky voice. For the gruff wolf Katie used Deeper Vocals.
When the pigs' mother kicked them out of the house Katie used a sound effect which sounded like a barn door opening then closing. It was really fun and I am hoping that next week I will be able to try it out myself!

Talent Development

Talent, Talent, Talent Development! Today we were still writing our stories but, we were improving them much more. Before we started to write today Katie showed us and interview with Roald Dahl. You know how he wrote about that Giant Peach? He actually got that idea from his own apple tree! We also got a sheet that had loads of stuff on it that you needed to have in your narrative story such as Word Pictures and Lead Sentences. Word Pictures are just like describing words. It's where you describe something, somewhere, or someone. It's just like painting a picture in the reader's head. 

Lead sentences is the starting of a story or a sentence. To make a story unique or intriguing, you need original lead sentences. I think I'm making much more progress since last week and my story is now getting more interesting. 

Hi Anna.
Well done on a productive session during our writing talent development today.  You used your time wisely and made great progress with your creative, narrative piece.  It was wonderful to see you so focussed, and offering help to others when it was needed.  Keep up the great effort.
Katie.

Writing My Story

Today in Talent Development we started writing our stories. My story is called Dognapped. It's about a little girl called who goes to Mixhole Beach with her mum and while they're there her dog Durello goes missing. The programme I am going to use to present my story is Garageband. I am planning to record my voice reading the story with a series of pictures along the way. I am looking forward to using Garageband for the first time and I am excited about entering it into the Made Awards. One of the things Katie said would make the story more interesting is that I should use more descriptive writing. I think that should be a challenge because I don't want my story to be too complicated. Other than that I think my story is going really well and hope to make good progress next week as well.  

Week2-Talent Development

This week for Talent Development we started planning our story. We looked at how you use a narrative structure.  There are usually 8 parts:
1. Status Quo. Is how the story started.
2. Initial Problem. Is the beginning of the problem.
3. Exposition. The initial problem starts to grow.
4. Complications. The little problems that build up to the crisis.
5. Crisis. Where all the action is.
6. Turning Point. Is pretty much the happy ending and it's where everything starts to go back to normal.
7. Denouement (day-nu-moan). This is the part of the story where you can just take a deep breath and relax. The wickedness is all over and the good guys have won!
8. Description of the new Status Quo. What happens after the denouement.
So, that's what we learnt in Talent Development today. I wonder what we'll be doing next week!

First Day Back At Enrich! New Talent Development!

Finally, back at Enrich again! We've already got our new talent development. There were three choices once again. Documentries, art and storytelling. I chose storytelling which is narrative writing. We write a story and then film it and act it out. First though we had to watch a couple of Made Award winner's stories.  Then we had to make negative and positive comments about each of them. Then we had to choose at least 2 fairy tales from 6 choices. They were, Beauty and the Beast, Cinderella, Snow White, The Three Little Pigs and Little Red Riding Hood. I chose Beauty and the Beast and Cinderella. Then we had to complete some sheets about them. The first sheet was about the main character's personalities and their qualities. On the second sheet we had to write down what the problem in the story, the resolution and what we liked and what we'd change. On the third sheet we had to make a flow chart of the settings in the story in order. There was a few more sheets but I didn't get to finish them all. I am so looking forward to the next session!  

Teacher comment

Anna you are self motivated and organized and you have embraced the new challenges that Enrich has provided. You use your time wisely and effectively to make the most of new opportunities and you willingly go the extra mile in all the work you do, and you definitely live up to the expectations of working in a high trust environment. Great start at Enrich!